Refrain from fighting Fire...with Fire - November 8, 2010

The red sun's hot rays blazed down on the dusty desert. The sky of shifting colors went from purple, to pink, to red and orange... a soft wind blowing. Raiden stood with his arms folded and his gray eyes narrowed, glaring at a certain someone he hasn't seen in a while. Tufts of his dirty blond hair whipped in front of his eyes. How dare he decide to show up now?

" Hello, Raiden. I've been looking forward to this gathering. " the man said. The man's arms were ripped, rippling with past-battle scars. He had the same features of the boy...aging gray eys and dirty blond hair with tings of gray. A small smirk came across his face. Raiden just stared in distaste. The man was struggling to meet his intense gray gaze.

" You... You come to me acting as if I still except you as my Father. Do you not see what you've done? Illuminos has perished because of your doings. I did not come here to make small talk, Father. I came here to get rid of something I should of got rid of long time ago..." Raiden raised his hand in the air, his eyes flaming. Immediately, at Raiden's will, a tendril of fire began to dance around his hand, making his eyes dance along with it...changing colors from red,orange, and back to gray. The Father was utterly impressed at his son's progress, but he just sneered, flexing his muscles and chuckling.

" Raiden, my boy, do not know that our powers our equal? I'm just stronger! You'll be wasting your time, fighting fire with fire! " The Father laughed back, copying exactly what his son was doing. Raiden's expression didn't change. He would NOT let his Father win this time. This...is for Mother.

" You think I am as weak as I was when I was seven? " Raiden questioned. " The insolence. I am not that weak, defenseless boy that couldn't save his Mother, Satoru. That was NEVER me. This is me. This is who you are facing! " Raiden yelled, lunging at his Father at the last word, his fists ablaze with flame.  He ran toward his Father, cocking his fist back, a wild look in his eyes. " I am the one...who will KILL you once and for all!!!! YAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!! " As Raiden's fist sailed toward his Father's face, everything seemed to go in slow motion. Raiden 's heart was beating slowly with anticipation, the steady beat ringing through his ears. Satoru was taken by suprise at his sons attitude, and was paraylzed in shock, watching as a blazing fist met with his face. His eyes slowly widen as Satoru was thrown back by the impact, twisting the air. He flew airborne by the punch of his own Son's fist. A wide, evil sneer spread scross Raiden's hardened face. He would smirk...he would sneer...but never smile. He can thank Satoru for that. As Satoru slammed against the florr, rolling and tumbling in the dust, he thought, You will pay for your doings, Father... and your punishment does not mean living.

( No one copy this because these characters are real characters from the book I'm writing! )

TO BE CONTINUED....

-Kin Kazama

 

Refrain from fighting Fire...with Fire - Kin Kazama

Date: 01/05/2011

By: Kin

Subject: hey again!!

My website has been updated!! www.illuminos.webnode.com ppl!! WOO!!

Date: 11/19/2010

By: Anonymous

Subject: Neat!

Raiden sounds so cool! I think you've gotten just about all the advice you can get here. That story is amazing! Perhaps I shall see more of this Raiden Ushiro on this site. ;)

Date: 11/19/2010

By: Kin

Subject: Re: Neat!

Well, you can! Go on my website, www.illuminos.webnode.com, the website for my book! you'll see quit a lot of him there. XD

Date: 11/23/2010

By: Kin

Subject: Re: Neat!

Wait! Whoa, whoa, whooooaaaa!!! How the heck do you know his last name, and I didnt even say it in the story? Are you stalking Raiden??!!!

Date: 11/24/2010

By: Anonymous

Subject: Re: Re: Neat!

.......If you write another story on this site that tops this one, I'll tell you how I know. Let's just say, I'm not as anonymous as I seem to be.

Date: 11/24/2010

By: Gigi

Subject: Re: Re: Re: Neat!

Creepy... I agree though, I want to read more of this!

Date: 11/11/2010

By: Tess

Subject: yaa!

Kin, this is really good! I get what Antonio is saying though. Maybe you could replace that part with something like: ...once and for all." Raiden yelled as his fist sailed towards...

Date: 11/11/2010

By: Antonio

Subject: Good

This was awesome until Raiden says "YAAAAAA!!!!", then it was kinda cheesy.

Great piece though; I want to know what comes next!

Date: 11/14/2010

By: Kin

Subject: Re: Good

lol. Thanks for the constructive critism! That part hasn't even reached my book yet( thank goodness ), and after I read it a few times, it did sound retarded...But it was to late to change! Thanks anyways!

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