No More Pain - October 16, 2010

Drip, drip. Her blood left a trail of small little dots towards a small closet. He opened the door, and held out his hands. She looked up, her cheeks wet with tears. "It's over" he said, kissing her gently on the lips as he pulled her up. "No more pain" he said, holding her close. He pulled out a gun and she nodded, huddling into his chest. "I love you." She nodded once more. BANG! He held her corpse. "No more pain" he whispered again. BANG! They fell in a lovers embrace that not even Death could part. Now two children haunts the house, playing hide-and-go-seek. And sometimes the take the form of two teenagers sharing a loving kiss.
The End

-Lady-Chan

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No More Pain - Lady Chan

Date: 09/06/2011

By: MEL

Subject: cool

Love the slash between creepy yet romantic a totally cool combination "thumbs up"

Date: 02/27/2011

By: Pinquill girl

Subject: 0.0

laughs at what Gigi said.
liked the part where ghosts appear as two teenagers sharing a kiss. Sad, though.

Date: 10/26/2010

By: Antonio

Subject: Advice

Lady Chan,
This is really good, but you should try following a plot and focusing on a story line. Then you can go into detail and have a longer story too!

Date: 11/05/2010

By: Lady-chan

Subject: Re: Advice

Actually it's not supposed to be a long story, but I get where you're coming from since I could've written the back story/prologue to it. It might make more sense, but I was aiming for something more ambiguous and slightly creepy since there's no real need for it. Hmmm, now that I think about it maybe I will write a back story to this. A prequel of sorts.

Date: 10/19/2010

By: Grape

Subject: Ahh!

Creepy, yet romantic... nice!

Date: 10/17/2010

By: Gigi

Subject: ...

I'm going to have a hard time falling asleep tonight...

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