If Only - January 31, 2011

If only we could fly
If only we could be
In each other's arms
And not just in our dreams

If only we could see
The good that lies ahead
Overpowering our hurt
And murdering our dread

If only we could smile
If only we could beam
If only everything
Wasn't as it seems...

-Molly
 

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If Only - Molly

Date: 02/19/2011

By: Himedal

Subject: This one I meant

This poem I meant.

Your poems are all good but if you allow me I want to say:

Perhaps if you give your poems some more time, they can be much better. I mean instead of writing lots of poems, try and mix some of your ideas in one poem. In this way your poem will me more meaningful. I don't mean your poems are bad. They are good. Just don't hasten to write a poem. Strong idea and imagery is very important in poetry.

You have talent so keep up. :)

Date: 03/05/2011

By: Molly

Subject: Re: This one I meant

i'm not but 14, remember that. and it's only the start. i plan to finish it up. that just came from the heart and so i wrote it down. if it flows, i write it. what i put up here is just the rough draft.

Date: 02/02/2011

By: Gigi

Subject: <3

This is so good! I really understand the feelings...

Date: 02/09/2011

By: Molly

Subject: Re: <3

Actually, me and the guy I wrote it for are more than likely going to finish it and turn it into a song. Is that a good idea?

Date: 02/10/2011

By: Gigi

Subject: Re: Re: <3

That's a really good idea! It would make a great song!

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